Many hours and re-drafts and edits and re-edits later and it turned into a 6,500 word beast that didn't really work out.
I think the problem is that I changed my mind (mulitple times) whilst I was writing it.
REGROUP MY THOUGHTS
To get some space from it, I went off to write something else and -- would you believe it -- ended up with two short stories that I really quite like the shape of.
I love the creative process.